Assignment 2
200401110 Sangseek Min
30. June. 2010
A Dangerous Temptation, i'm lovin' it
I like watching documentaries. And I remember seeing a lot of really good documentaries. Especially Super Size Me. It is a American documentary film directed by and starring Morgan Spurlock. The contents of the film are as follows. Spurlock eats only McDonald's food. It shows us how it effects on man's physical and psychological factors. And it tries to warn us about something going on fast-food. After seeing Super Size Me, I became aware of dangers of fast-food.
Mc Donald's founder Ray Kroc said "look after the customer and the business will take care of itself". Mc Donald is the world's largest chain of hamburger fast-food restaurants. Mc Donald are found in 119 countries. And it serve nearly 47 million customers everyday. Mc Donald has over 31,000 worldwide chains. Therefore South Korea also is not an exception country of eating Mc Donald. Mc Donald is South Korea`s second largest fast-food chain. So, sometimes I go to Mc Donald to eat the hamburger. Furthermore I enjoy eating its french fries.
Mc Donald is the target of criticism. In some countries, people have boycotted Mc Donald because it harms the health of people and destroys the environment. Though I also know it is bad for my health, I usually eat it. Then, why do people eat Mc Donald's hamburger in spite of its risks? That's why Mc Donald stimulates us into eating through the provocative advertising and strategic business ability. Besides Mc Donald's slogan i'm lovin' it and a mascot Ronald are very dangerous for children. Because they are very friendly to children, they lure children to eat a hamburger.
Despite the globalization of fast-food especially Mc Donald, we know how to respond it. Lotteria is South Korea`s first largest fast-food chain because It has a lot of localization menus. And it also serves a variety of healthy menus. For example, a rice burger, a kimchi burger and a Korean native beef burger and so on. Also, there is a country which is unable to meet Mc Donald. That is Iran because the country don't like the United States. But paradoxically, Iran people really like hamburgers. Moreover, Iran has their own hamburger chains. Iran`s first largest fast-food chain is Super Star, and second is Aladdin. When I stayed in Iran, I often went to Aladdin fast-food chain which has a special healthy menu. Amazingly, it is a fish berger.
I really oppose the growth of fast-food chains around the world. But it is an inevitable assignment for today. So many countries are adopting fast-foods in their own way. South Korea is an exemplary model for it. In conclusion, I repeat that it is a better way for fast-food chains to localize the hamburger and make the fast-food more health.
Hello, this is Song Min Hee.
ReplyDeleteas one of also definitely impressed persons with SUPERSIZE ME, your hook is too weak. If you spin a story with SUPERSIZE ME, this essay will be more attractive.
overall, this essay is very interesting dealing with our food life. however, let's go back to your thesis statement.
you'd better remind yourself of what you gonna tell. 1st and 3rd paragraghes are sidetracked from the thesis, I think.
I sincerely hope you to develop your essay well. :D
in addition!
you quotated an advertising, I think it shoud be in quotation mark. I'm not sure, you need to check its form
you did a good job.
ReplyDeleteI think your title is very attractive. And metioning the documentary "super size me" is also good try. But I think it is not strong enough as a hook. give more detail.
And overall it is hard to understand what you want to say. Even though you give lots of good examples, sometimes I can't understand why that example came there. I hope you make your thesis and purpose more clear.